Monday, 11 March 2013

5-7-5 Poems


These are not technically Haikus but along that line.


So here are my three 
5-7-5 poems for you
to read and critique:



Loneliness

loneliness, a leaf
falls softly to the ground and
nobody sees it.


Surrender

Three daughters, one wife
my life is a tightrope of
calm apologies.


12 comments:

  1. "Surrender

    Three daughters, one wife
    my life is a tightrope of
    calm apologies."

    That one right there is a way avoid 98 out of 99 problems ;)
    Cleverly managed!

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  2. I'm very drawn to the lonely leaf.
    Nice trio you've put together!

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  3. I loved all three of these poems-but Surrender made me smile because of it's perfection! I am also one of three sisters, so along with my mom, my dad was outnumbered! Now I have my own daughter-so the odds are still slightly stacked against my husband:)

    These were so very good-all of them!

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    1. Thanks Valerie. There is definitely peace in Surrender. :)

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  4. I love these. Such a simple, yet powerful, treatment of the prompt.

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