Thirty-three
He
died
when
he was
thirty-three.
died
when
he was
thirty-three.
It's not like we weren't warned. We all knew he was coming back.
Some looked
forward
to it.
Some
were
scared.
forward
to it.
Some
were
scared.
But no one
expected this.
expected this.
Interesting - jesus came back as - left up to the viewer of the pic eh? hmmm possibly tear gas or that one alien from star trek? just kidding nice answer to the prompt!
ReplyDeleteWell I'm not sure what he came back as but some really messed up happened because this is a CREEPY photo.
DeleteThanks for you input. Steven.
Neat, I like how the form makes a cross.
ReplyDeleteThanks - it was cool how the words lined up.
DeleteWonderful how you were able to connect the image to Jesus's second coming!
ReplyDeleteThanks rosanna.
DeleteInteresting. The form of the poem is nifty.
ReplyDeleteThank you sir.
DeleteI love this, love the cross shape of the words and, obviously, the words themselves. Well done.
ReplyDeleteYa it was cool the way it worked out. I had the idea in my head ad I write out ince - exactly 33 words frist shot. There is something magic about this word combination. I arranged in in few different patterns and it always worked. I 'm happy with the way it ended up.
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ReplyDeleteno one expected . . . yup, there is that.
It was definitely unexpected,
DeleteNicely done, it took me a minute to grasp, (yes, I'm all slow, it comes from age) and I like the cross.
ReplyDeleteHa ha. Its on topic for the new pope this month too.
DeleteThis is beautiful! Very good.
ReplyDeleteTHanks Bo
DeleteThis is great - with or without the picture, actually. "But no one expected this" - such a sense of creepy foreboding, but a little tongue-in-cheek, too. Great job!
ReplyDeleteYes I wondered if the formatting really helps or does it take way from the words because i agree that stand up on their own. I was also a little worried about the subject matter there can be allot of controversy with old JC.
DeleteWonderfully written piece - mysterious and a little disturbing. And yes, I really like the structure you've used. Excellent job!
ReplyDeleteTHanks I wondered if it helps or hurts I appreciate the comment :)
DeleteSo much truth in the last statement - no matter one's expectations.
ReplyDeleteThe Spanish Inquisition?
ReplyDeleteHa ha, couldn't resist.
Very disquieting piece.
Whoah... this is great!
ReplyDeleteThanks :)
Deletegood post. What will be is a mystery and certainly unpredictable.
ReplyDeleteYa you bet Ann thanks :)
DeleteI like the second one as well-though unlike all others,not being a Christian,I did not see the "cross" but what appealed to me was the kind of ominous ending after a pregnant pause in the last two lines ,which somehow was missing in the "prose" format.My apologies if I come across as silly but am not conversant with "structure" or other "literary" quantifiers(?)-just went with the feel Sam.Whichever form you choose,love the creepy feeling -one keeps expecting some thing out of a horror film-reminded me of Poe's "The monkey's paw":-)
ReplyDeleteHey thanks for your input Atreyee -interesting. Thank-you for taking the time :)
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